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Tempest - C00 - Prologue :WIP:

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     In the vast reaches of the universe there exist many galaxies and many more worlds.  Countless legends have came and passed with time, as stars die and are born anew.  There is one legend that has long been forgotten.  It is a tale of love, tragedy, and hope.
     It begins in a rather small galaxy, within which one star shone rather brightly.  This gem held a very diverse star system; ten planets, an aseroid belt, and a rather unique dust cloud.  Of the ten planets, only the fourth bore life.  The people of this planet called their star Syr'h'ne, and they had accomplished much long before this story takes place.
     Their planet, Entaeil, was a vast utopia of life.  Everything thrived.  The land was rich and the spirits were strong.  This did not come without consequence, however.  The history of the Si'Rehl, as they called themselves, was rattled with a rather violent history.
     You see, they have a magic, as you would call it.  Their bodies are very attune to the nature of their planet, causing them to be able to control the elements around them at will.
A re-write of the prologue of 'Tempest'

I had origionally written a rather long prologue for Tempest several years ago, but as time passed, I realized it was too 'bland' there was a lot of science, little myth, and basically... It was boring. I had decided to scrap it, but i wound up using the latter quarter of it to open the first chapter.

I read it recently, and decided that, while it was boring, there was a lot of information within it that I had wanted to express. I decided a few days ago, instead of scrapping it, I should just re-write it.

This is my attempt, as it stands, I have not gotten rather far, and my plan is to express more than double the information that I had before, so the reader is not left completely in the dark at the beginning of the story.

I am pleased with how it is turning out, let me know what you think, and I will post the origional prologue in my scraps for comparisons.
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